Writing the Thesis

Professor Martha C. Pennington
Elizabethtown College

  

GENERAL ADVICE

 

THE 5 MOST IMPORTANT THINGS FOR ALL PhD STUDENTS

 

AVOID ISOLATION.

KEEP BUSY.

INTERACT WITH YOUR SUPERVISOR.

TAKE RESPONSIBILITY.

COMMUNICATE – TALK AND WRITE – AS A MAJOR PART OF THE RESEARCH PROCESS. 


 

10 WAYS TO ACHIEVE THE 5 MOST IMPORTANT THINGS

 

BE CONNECTED ELECTRONICALLY.

Get on the internet and use the internet. There are vast resources of helpful advice for writing the thesis there, in addition to information resources specific to your field.

 

GET INVOLVED IN THE ACADEMIC COMMUNITY OF YOUR FIELD.

Read other theses. Take all opportunities to go to lectures and conferences.

 

MAKE A COMMUNITY WHERE YOU ARE.

Build thesis support relationships with one or more other students and meet regularly (at least monthly) to discuss ideas and problems, and to give mutual feedback on writing.

 

KNOW YOURSELF.

Make a list of own writing problems; work on these, and keep an eye out for them in drafts.

 

FOCUS YOUR SUPERVISOR’S ATTENTION ON YOUR NEEDS.

Ask your supervisor for specific feedback in the areas you want and need input on.

 

DEVELOP A DISCIPLINED APPROACH TO YOUR WORK.

Get into a routine pattern, with designated place, time of day, and minimum period of time for work on the thesis. Make sure people around you know not to disturb you during this work.

 

KEEP YOUR MOMENTUM; DON’T WASTE TIME.

Do not let a week pass without doing something on the thesis. Write regularly (at least weekly), to help develop ideas and create draft material for the thesis -  e.g. written summaries of sources, diary of problems and how they were handled. It is not a good idea to do research work for long periods without writing. Keep in mind that the whole point is to get a written work completed, so you might as well write through the whole process of your PhD study.

 

CREATE AN ONGOING DIALOGUE.

Ask questions as soon as they arise, and keep asking a question till you feel satisfied that you have a full answer which you understand. Students are often reluctant to pursue things they do not understand. Sometimes this is a matter of not feeling confident to approach the supervisor. Try out questions first on a thesis support “buddy” or other student. Discuss your question in detail, so you will have thought the question through in depth before meeting your supervisor.

 

ADOPT A SCHOLARLY ATTITUDE AND APPROACH TO YOUR WORK.

Work to a high standard. Be meticulous, avoiding the temptation to take shortcuts. Spend the time and effort needed to do a thorough and careful job of designing, researching and writing your thesis.

 

BE AWARE THAT YOU ARE A NOVICE AND AN APPRENTICE.

Avoid the common tendency of postgraduate students to think you are an expert in some aspect of research or writing a thesis. Never proceed with research before consulting your supervisor. PhD students always make mistakes when they carry out research without first clearing procedures with a knowledgeable researcher. Common problems are “fatal flaws” in questionnaire design (e.g. wrong type of scale), invalid interview procedure, wrong data type (not appropriate to theory or planned statistical procedures or method of analysis), inadequate sample size or composition.

 

SPECIFIC ADVICE FOR WRITING THE PhD THESIS

 

BE CONVENTIONAL IN ORGANISATION AND STYLE.

Follow the conventions of thesis research and writing in your field.

 

BE ORIGINAL IN WORDS AND CONTENT.

Originality is a key criterion on which a thesis is judged.

 

LEARN TECHNICAL TERMS AND USE THEM CORRECTLY.

A major part of learning a field is becoming proficient at its terminology.

 

BE EXPLICIT.

Leave nothing unsaid or implicit, and leave out no words. Bring ideas to the surface and put them into words. Introduce all abbreviations, terms, and new ideas clearly.

 

GIVE CLEAR INDICATIONS OF STRUCTURE AND RELATIONSHIPS.

Link ideas using markers (e.g. conjunctions) of their logical relationships. Use punctuation (especially comma) to show the structure of sentences and their component parts.

 

BE PRECISE.

Develop a precise idea and then write exactly what you intend. Avoid overgenerality, vagueness, ambiguity, or informality.

 

UNDERSTATE; NEVER OVERSTATE.

Avoid sweeping generalisations; generalise modestly and carefully. Never exaggerate.

 

BE CONSERVATIVE.

Do not propose anything without good evidence. Do not go “out on a limb” or make rash statements. Avoid definitive conclusions. Hedge your bets by considering multiple factors.

 

ARGUE YOUR POINT OF VIEW; DO NOT MERELY STATE IT.

It is not adequate to simply state a point of view. Nor is it adequate to simply make a claim prefaced by “As it is widely believed,”  “As it is well-known,” or simply “Clearly,…”.

 

FAIRLY EVALUATE OTHER WORK AND POINTS OF VIEW.

Discuss other people’s work and points of view, and evaluate them differentially, i.e. assess them as more or less reasonable, more or less similar to your own. Avoid any tendency to “strike down the opposition” or dismiss other work or viewpoints as entirely wrong or unjustified. Remember, you are a novice with only an initial understanding of your field and the work which has preceded yours.

 

BE CONSISTENT.

Follow a specific convention of style or methodology consistently. Use words with consistent meanings.

 

BE UP-TO-DATE.

Make your work new and relevant to the present state of your field. Bring your references up to within one year of what you are writing. Do not rely on old notions or methodologies, unless you are explicitly arguing that they need to be revisited and reconsidered.

 

BE SCRUPULOUSLY HONEST.

Reference all ideas in a way which makes clear exactly where they came from and how you obtained all information from other sources. Avoid referencing sources you have not actually read yourself. State limitations and problems in the research.

 

USE WRITING AS A THINKING PROCESS.

Keep notes; write ideas as they come to you when reading or thinking.

 

WRITE CHAPTER DRAFTS IN STAGES.

Do not wait to the end of your research process to write any thesis chapter. Draft thesis chapters as the stages of the research are completed, e.g. 1-Lit Review and Bibliography, 2-Methodology, 3-Results, 4-Discussion, 5-Conclusion, 6-Introduction, Abstract, Contents. Write 3 drafts at a minimum. Draft 1 is a rough draft, for your eyes only; its purpose is to develop and organise your ideas. Draft 2 is to show others, including the supervisor, for comment. Draft 3 is to rewrite and polish the work, based on input from others and your own close and careful reading after at least a two-week gap, so that you will see it with “fresh” eyes and mind.

 

NEVER WORRY ABOUT LENGTH IN A FIRST DRAFT.

Worrying about length as you are writing will restrict the free flow and development of ideas in an early stage. Once ideas are fully developed, they can be written in a more compact form.

 

THE STRUCTURE OF A THESIS

A student working towards a higher degree has to function in an academic community as well as in a discipline community made up of those who work in and have knowledge of a particular field or discipline. Each community has its own rules, many of which are implicit not explicit, and ways of functioning which members need to learn and use if they are to be successful. Only by learning and following these community-specific rules and practices can the student become a successful member of an academic or discipline community.

Members of the general academic community have certain expectations about written work. A thesis or dissertation must conform to these to a certain extent, in order to be accepted as a work of the proper type, such as an academic essay. In addition, each academic discipline has certain expectations about written work, based on its own practices, beliefs, and written traditions.

A PhD thesis or dissertation is a longer, deeper, and more detailed work than one written at  Master’s level. More importantly, it is held up to much higher standards of originality and scholarship. Following the advice below will help you to succeed in the thesis writing process.

Below a common or “standard” thesis format is first provided, followed by variations found in recently completed theses from three different fields, none of which follow this format exactly.

 

COMMON (STANDARD) THESIS STRUCTURE

Title Page

Abstract

Acknowledgements

Contents 

Chapter 1:     Introduction to Thesis (usually a short chapter)

Chapter 2:     Literature Review

Chapter 3:     Methodology

 Chapter 4:     Results

 Chapter 5:     Discussion / Interpretation

Chapter 6:     Recommendations / Future Research (sometimes included in

Discussion / Interpretation or Conclusion)

Chapter 7:     Conclusion

References / Bibliography

Appendices

 

COMPARISONS OF STRUCTURE OF 3 PhD THESES

 

Computing (A topic in the modeling and processing of a particular type of data)

Chapter Title                                                                         Type

Abstract                                                                                 Abstract

Ch 1    Introduction                                                                Thesis overview

Ch 2    Background and Lit Review                                       Conceptual background, Lit. review

Ch 3    Three Real Problems and Their Models                    Technical content, Problem posing

Ch 4    Theoretical Analysis and Algorithms                        Results

Ch 5    Applications and Experimental Design                     Results

Ch 7    Conclusions and Future Work                                   Conclusions, Summary, Prospect

 

Linguistics (A study of bilingualism in a particular country)

Chapter Title                                                                         Type

Abstract                                                                                  Abstract

Ch 1    Introduction                                                                Thesis overview

Ch 2    Background                                                                Historical, etc. background

Ch 3    Overview of conceptual frameworks                     Conceptual background, Lit. review

Ch 4    Language attitudes: Matched guise                           Results

Ch 5    Language diary study                                                 Results

Ch 6    Questionnaire study                                                   Results

Ch 7    Field experiment: Actual language                            Results

Ch 8    Concluding remarks                                                   Conclusions, summary, future research

 

Tourism (A study on a particular city [X] as portrayed through tourism literature)

Chapter Title                                                                         Type

Abstract                                                                                 Abstract

Introduction                                                                            Conceptual etc. background, overview

Ch 1    Tourists, Travellers, Sightseers                                 Conceptual and historical background

Ch 2    The Tourist Destination                                             Conceptual background

Ch 3    Sound and Vision                                                       Conceptual background

Ch 4    As Seen On Television                                              Conceptual background, Case studies

Ch 5    Recognising the Recognisable                                   Conceptual background, Case studies

Ch 6    Views of [X]                                                              Results

Ch 7    [X] as The Vanishing Lady                                         Results

Ch 8    The Travel Show                                                        Results

Ch 9    Holiday                                                                       Results

Ch 10 Home Truths From Abroad                                         Conclusions, Summary

 

Academic Writing: Building a Construction of Ideas

Academic thinking and reasoning involve building a construction of related ideas. Thus, it is only to be expected that the expression of academic thinking and reasoning through language (whether spoken or written) will also involve building a construction of related ideas. The utility of written language for expressing complex thoughts and constructions of ideas resides in its resources for building logical relations, meaning relations, and abstraction.

A clause is the minimal component of a written sentence, said to express one complete idea. Frequently, two clauses or more will be joined together or merged in order to express relationships between ideas.

E.g., The point can be debated; it is not universally agreed.

The point is not universally agreed and thus can be debated.

Not all writers share that point of view; nevertheless, it is a common position.

Not all writers share that point of view, although it is a common position. 

         The rebels were infiltrating the government; this occurred before fighting began

          Long before the fighting had begun, the rebels were infiltrating the government. 

Most commonly, the relationships between ideas are shown with the aid of punctuation and specific markers of the meaning and type of relationship intended. The first type of example below is uncommon in a thesis because there are no explicit connections made between the ideas. This makes possible several somewhat different interpretations as to what the writer wishes to emphasise or to argue. In the second of the two examples, the writer makes explicit connections between ideas.

E.g.      The news spread quickly. It was disseminated in a series of pamphlets. These received a wide audience. The public responded by calling for the overthrow of the government.

The news spread quickly, disseminated in a series of widely read pamphlets, which resulted in a call from the public for the overthrow of the government.
 

Meaning relations and logical relations can be shown by specific words and order of information.

E.g.      The news spread quickly through a series of widely read pamphlets, which resulted in a call from the public for the overthrow of the government.
 

A complex chain of reasoning or cause-and-effect can also be built with the aid of abstraction.

E.g.   The rapid dissemination of the news in a series of widely read pamphlets resulted in a call from the public for the overthrow of the government.


A key aspect of academic writing is the use of complex noun phrases to express complex ideas, discipline-specific concepts and constructs, and technical terms. The latter often consist of complex combinations of three or more words.

Computing         the network node frequency list algorithm

Education          computer-managed learning environments

Nursing              nursing home emergency service personnel

Sociology          regional survey sampling methodology

Some of the types of problems students have in English academic writing are reviewed in the next sections, with reference to published sources. Many of these make references to students coming from certain language backgrounds, and this information is included here though only a few languages are included.

  

MAKING CONNECTIONS

Student writers tend to overuse coordinating conjunctions compared to experienced native writers.

Coordinating Conjunctions - Frequency (% of words) (after Ringbom, 1998, pp. 45-46)

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                        Native         French             Spanish           Finish              Swedish              Dutch              German

but                     .36                   .66                   .70                   .57                   .58                   .64                     .67    

so                      .16                   .27                   .33                   .30                   .26                   .31                     .31

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Alternatives to but: [same clause] yet, however, nevertheless, in contrast;

[preceding clause] although, even though

Alternatives to so: [same clause] therefore, thus, hence, consequently, as a consequence, as a result; [preceding clause] since, because

Adverbial Connectors – Overuse and Underuse by Swedish and French Learners of English (as contrasted with native English speakers) (after Altenberg and Tapper, 1998, p. 91)

 

OVERUSE                                                                             UNDERUSE

 

Additive                                 moreover                                           

                                                                                                         Resultative                 hence  

                                                                     therefore

                                                                                                                                                            thus

Appositive                              for instance

                                                namely

 

Contrastive                on the contrary                                   Contrastive                however

                                                                     though

                                                                                                                                                            yet

Corroborative                       of course        

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NOTES: 1- Student writers often use moreover as equivalent to simple and. Moreover is properly used to add one reason or step in an argument to another, with the most important reason or step coming last and preceded by moreover. E.g. The method was chosen as that most commonly used in other investigations of similar type. It was, moreover, considered the most effective means of achieving the desired result. The correct meaning would not be given by and or in addition.

    2-     For instance and namely are less commonly used in academic writing than other alternatives. Instead of for instance, use for example and e.g. (which is the Latin abbreviation for ‘for example’). Instead of namely, use that is or i.e. (which is the Latin abbreviation for ‘that is’.)

    3-Student writers often use on the contrary as a simple marker of contrast equivalent to but or however. On the contrary has a more specific usage, however, that makes it rare in a thesis. It is to mark a contradiction, i.e., a statement of a  difference of opinion or belief. This usage has been stereotyped in the old Basil Rathbone Sherlock Holmes films, as the bumbling Dr. Watson would often make a statement which the much cleverer Holmes would contradict and set right beginning with, “On the contrary, my dear Watson, …”. E.g. Watson: The thief obviously escaped through the window. Holmes: On the contrary, my dear Watson. Clearly, he could not have escaped that way, as the window has obviously not been opened for quite some time, …

    4-Of course suggests obviousness and thus that there is no need to argue one’s case. It is therefore not a very useful word for a thesis.

 

Pilot Study of Four Fields

In a pilot study on the current project, our project partner, Dr Ylva Berglund (University of Oxford) carried out lexical analysis on theses from four fields (Computing, Film Studies, Linguistics, and Tourism) as well as PhD student writing samples from each of them. One of the things she looked at was conjunctive adverbs:

additionally, also, consequently, conversely, finally, furthermore, hence, however, indeed, likewise, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, otherwise, similarly, then, therefore, thus

The following charts summarise her findings:

 

Frequency in Different Texts

 

 

 

KEY:

TTII – Tourism thesis II (Canadian)

TT    – Tourism thesis (British)

TSD – Tourism student draft chapters

TS    – Tourism student samples1+2

 

LT    – Linguistics Thesis

LS    – Linguistics student samples 1+2

 

FT    – Film thesis

FS     – Film student sample 1

 

CT    – Computing thesis (with formulas removed)

CS    – Computing student samples 1+ 2

 

Proportions in Different Texts 

  

EVALUATION/PRECISION

  

Non-expert writers often attempt to win readers to their point of view by strengthening their statements through use of intensifiers such as completely or very:

E.g.      The voyage of the Bounty was a completely misguided adventure.

This is a very difficult question to answer.

Given the conservatism of academic writing, intensifiers should be used sparingly, to avoid overstatement or imprecision.

SCALAR INTENSIFIER CATEGORIES              German learner overuse (%)

(after Lorenz, 1998)

Amplifiers:                 Maximizers (completely, absolutely, etc.)                28.7

               Boosters (very, highly, immensely, etc.)                                48.0

Downtoners:   Approximators (nearly, virtually etc.)                                  20.8

                                    Compromisers (fairly, pretty, rather etc.)                             35.6

                                    Diminishers (slightly, a little etc.)                                        64.1

                                    Minimizers (hardly, scarcely etc.)                                        21.3

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PERSONAL REFERENCE 

Academic style is often impersonal, in the attempt to achieve objectivity and a focus on ideas and information rather than on the writer. Inexperienced writers are prone to overuse first and second person pronouns (I, we, and you). In some fields, it is normal for the writer of the thesis to refer to him/herself as I, though it is more common to refer to the writer of the thesis as the researcher and s/he. In disciplines where I may be used to refer to the writer of the thesis, you may also be acceptable to refer to the reader of the thesis. In disciplines where third person reference is the norm, there might be occasions to refer to the reader or the audience for this thesis. However, it is common in the formal style of academic writing for the reader to remain implicit and unmentioned.

The use of plural first person reference we can have many meanings:

E.g.      We can see that …                  we = ‘the writer and anyone else’, i.e. we = ‘everyone’

We will see that…                     we = ‘the writer and the reader’

            We have a tradition of…        we = ‘the writer and others in the same field’

We showed in this work..          we = ‘the writer together with other researchers’

We will show that…                  we = ‘the writer alone’

In the last case, the researcher him/herself is euphemistically referred to as we; this usage is called the ‘royal we’, as it is commonly used by royalty to refer to themselves (“We are not amused”). In sum, we can be considered to introduce a degree of ambiguity or imprecision in the thesis and should generally be avoided.

Third person reference (it, s/he and they) is by far the most common type in the thesis.

Pronouns - Frequency (% of words)          (after Ringbom, 1998, pp. 45-47)

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                        Native             French             Spanish           Finish              Swedish          Dutch              German

1                        .25                   .45                   .36                   .52                   .88                   .41                   1.36

we                      .34                   .81                   .98                   .65                 1.20                   .34                     .41

you                    .08                   .33                   .34                   .34                   .31                   .46                     .72

he                      .26                   .20                   .24                   .24                   .14                   .42                     .38

they                   .66                   .77                   .86                   .63                   .65                 1.07                   .75

it                      . 97                 1.16                 1.26                 1.42                 1.22                 1.14                 1.15

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References

 

Altenberg, B., and Tapper, M. (1998). The use of adverbial connectors in advanced Swedish learners’ written English. In S. Granger (ed.), Learner English on computer (pp. 80-93). London: Longman.

Lorenz, G. (1998). Overstatement in advanced learners’ writing: stylistic aspects of adjective intensification. In S. Granger (ed.), Learner English on computer (pp. 53-66). London: Longman.

Ringbom, H. (1998). Vocabulary frequencies in advanced learner English: a cross-linguistic approach. In S. Granger (ed.), Learner English on computer (pp. 41-52). London: Longman.